The Little English Lesson That Boosted Sales by 200%

August 5th, 2009

What if changing a few words on your website could increase your conversion rate by 200%? It happened to software company 37signals, and you can read the (short) story here.

37signals made a simple change in wording, from the phrase “Free Trial” to the phrase “See Plans and Pricing”. And BAM! 200% uptick in signups. If that doesn’t prove the value of choosing your words carefully, I give up.

Non-Boring English 101 – Denotation vs. Connotation

What 37signals discovered is the difference between denotation and connotation.

Denotation is the dictionary definition of a word. It’s a meaning that we can all agree on. For example, ‘spoon’ is defined as “a piece of cutlery with a shallow bowl-shaped container and a handle”.  Ok, I can agree to that.

Connotation, on the other hand, is all the meaning that an individual ascribes to a certain thing. If someone is an exotic spoon collector, the word may connote things like ‘adventure’ or ‘excitement’. On the other hand, if someone works in a spoon factory, the word may connote things like ‘work’ or ‘fatigue’.

There are cultural connotations as well. As we dig into our culture, we find lots of connotations that are common to large groups of people. A word like ‘executive’ may be defined as “a person responsible for the administration of a business”, but in America it may connote things like ‘money’ or ‘success’.

In almost every case, a word’s connotation has a greater effect than its denotation.

The True Meaning of Free

Free is a word that’s been put through the ringer for decades. There are so many shades of meaning that no one can really be sure what they’re getting when they get something for free. Perhaps it doesn’t cost money, but it does require sharing personal information. Or maybe it requires you to fill out a credit card application, or take a survey. While I would argue that these ‘free’ things are not truly free, they are nevertheless labeled with the word.

And all of this jumble of meaning has made consumers wary. We don’t trust the word. We’ve seen it used disingenuously so often, it puts us on our guard.

The True Meaning of ‘See’

It’s not about what 37signals did by changing their wording. It’s about what they didn’t do.

What they didn’t do was raise the little hairs on the back of our necks. They didn’t make us think twice about clicking that button, wondering what we might be signing ourselves up for. They didn’t set off our internal alarm, the one that rings whenever we see a sales pitch coming our way.

They chose words that made us comfortable and reaped the benefits.

Still think copywriters aren’t essential to your success?

Don’t Write Like a Robot

July 29th, 2009

When I tell people I’m a writer, it usually piques their interest. The follow up question is always “What do you write?” When the answer is marketing copy, the conversation usually ends. “Marketing copy? Ho-hum” they seem to say, wishing they had run into someone more interesting. Perhaps a journalist, or a novelist, or a joke writer for their favorite TV show.

Business writing is considered boring because it’s so often formulaic. It speaks in broad generalizations, vague buzzwords, and tired meaningless phrases. It’s considered boring because it IS boring.

Not only is it boring, but it dooms a business to obscurity. If the copy on your website sounds like the copy on every other website, how do you expect to be remembered?

The fix is this: write how you talk.

If you’ve never spoken a phrase like “offering a broad range of support tailored to meet your company needs”, don’t write one. Say it in your own way.  Say “I offer every kind of help you could possibly want”. It’s personable, it’s engaging, and it shows there’s a real person behind your copy.

You’re not a robot, don’t write like one.

Your Jingle Sucks

July 22nd, 2009

Before I moved into marketing, I flirted with a career as a songwriter. I’d been playing music since the age of 15, when I discovered an old dusty guitar in the guest room down the hall. I got it tuned, taught myself to play, and started on my new life path: rock stardom.

As I got older, went through college, and learned more about the world, I began to realize that my dream of making millions to rock wasn’t going to happen. Which was ok with me. I’d met enough musicians to know that even moderate levels of success required constant travel, getting screwed by shady club owners, and having more than the occasional audience completely ignore you. Not to mention willingly taking the emotional sucker punch that writing a good (or even a bad) song can be.

But I did learn quite a bit during those years. One of the biggest lessons I learned was the importance of a simple, singable melody. Called the ‘hook’ in popular music, it’s the piece of the song that gets stuck in your head. It’s the thing that keeps you and your music fresh in someone’s mind.

Jingle Bells

Which brings me to advertising jingles. When written well, they can be very powerful. Think of the McDonald’s jingle. It’s short, it’s catchy, and like it or not, every time you hear it you’ll think of McDonald’s.

That’s a jingle that knows how to do it’s job. Contrary to many of the meandering, cram-as-much-info-into-this-melody-as-we-can jingles we hear around the Capital Region. No, they’re not all bad, but there are some real stinkers out there.

If you are using a jingle as part of your marketing message, I’d simply ask this “Why a Jingle?” Especially now that the Internet gives us loads of messaging options, your money may be better spent on another tactic.

Grade Your Jingle

I’d also suggest you grade your jingle using the following criteria:

1. Is it Catchy?  Did you need to hear it more than twice before it got stuck in your head? If so, it’s probably not catchy enough to work.

2. Is it Unique?  Does it sound like another jingle out there? Was it made with the same old stock soundbeds that have been used for ages? If the answer is yes, you lose. You will not be remembered.

3. Does it Set a Mood?  The  McDonald’s jingle has a happy feel to it. Coupled with a line like “I’m Lovin’ It”, the commercials feel carefree. How does your music feel? If you can’t put some positive adjectives to it, your customers can’t either.

4. Is it Simple?  Musical complexity can be a beautiful thing. But in a 30 second spot, there’s just no room for it. If you want complexity and surprise, listen to Bach. If you want to move widgets, keep it as simple as possible.

5. What’s Would Bob Dylan Do?  If you’re using lyrics in your jingle, take a good hard look at the central message, and run it through the WWBDD test. If your message requires elaboration, you lose your audience. Think simple. Think “The Answer is Blowing in the Wind.” Think “You’re Gonna Make Me Lonesome When You Go”. Think “It’s all over now Baby Blue”.

At the very least, just think.